澳洲儿子试做Year 3NAPLAN 作文

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儿子今年3年级，要考NAPLAN。刚好隔壁有热心妈妈发了往年NAPLAN的试题链接，所以下载了一份回家让儿子做。其他科目我们可以自己改，但作文就真不知道他写得好坏了。在这里晒一晒儿子写的作文。有经验的妈妈帮忙看一看，给点意见和建议。

写作题目是这样的：
Today you are going to write a narrative or story.

The idea for your story is "The Box".
What is inside the box? How did it get there?
Is it valuable? Perhaps it is alive!
The box might reveal a message or something that was hidden.
What happens in your story if the box is opened?

Think about:
- the characters and where they are
- the complication or problem to be solved
- how the story will end.

Remember to:
- plan your story before you start
- write in sentences
- pay attention to the words you choose, your spelling and punctuation, and paragraphs
- check and edit your writing when you have finished.

另外一份作文题是 "What a mess” 要求大同小异。

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儿子的字写得很不好，我在这重新输入。以下是原文（包括最后一行to be continued）。


The Box

Micheal and Samuel were playing and found a box. "Ooh!" said Michael and Samuel. They carried it home "What's inside that box and where did you get it?" said dad. "We got it from the dump behind the houses and we are going to open it!" said the boys. So the dad opened the lid and looked in side "ooh!" said the children as their dad took out a kite  "Wow" said dad.


   to be continued...

[ 本帖最后由 Mintlolly 于 2012-4-23 20:47 编辑 ]

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这篇作文儿子有漏字，为方便大家理解，我加了几个红字。

"What a mess!"
My Dad said to my Mum, "what a mess!" because mum's room was a mess "it looks likea tornado has been in here!" "that's becuase I tried to paint my room" said mum. "You should of asked me to do it" said dad. "Anyway, lets start cleaning this room" my mum said to my dad, and she said to me you too."

在作文下面，他画了一幅画，画的是妈妈的MESSY房间。（儿子解释说是为了故事需要，妈妈的房间其实不MESSY)

[ 本帖最后由 Mintlolly 于 2012-4-23 20:56 编辑 ]

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求试题链接，谢谢。

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要是我写的话，就写箱子里珍藏着一份我当年的试卷。那次考试我考了70分，为了让生病的爸爸开心，我把70分改成了90分。后来爸爸从老师那里知道了这件事，并没有责备我，而是耐心的教育我要诚实。我决定以后再不说谎了。

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从2011 起 naplan 写作已经改成persuasive style of writing

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http://ourkidz.com.au/content/view/914/62/lang,en/

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上面那个链接已经无法下载了，楼主能分享一下三年级的试题吗？谢谢

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试试这个

http://www.bettereducation.com.au/naplan/NaplanPapers.aspx

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ooh用的太多了

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然后呢？有下文没？

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没有. 这就是他的结尾. 我感觉挺有趣,但老师可能就不这么觉得了.

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是吗? 谢谢了.

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这，怕字数不够吧。情节也不太完整。

要不请洋八路同学来帮忙看看

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记得最近一期是   学生该不该穿校服？

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最近好像网上所有NAPLAN PAST TEST PAPERS的DOWNLOAD全部被删除了, 以前随便都能找到的东西, 现在全部没有了

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我也是用的这个.先从bettereducation.com.au 进去，再点开旁边的选项“PAST EXAM PAPERS",再选择NAPLAN PAPERS 就可以了。

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lz，练错了。写作考的是persuasive writing.

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谢谢啦！不过好像题目上没有字数规定。 我也觉得情节稍微简单些。

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谢谢。

哪位家长知不知道有没有字数的规定啊？
而且，答卷上有没有打横格? 儿子在白纸上写字，从左到右就像下楼梯似的，卷面不整洁。

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果然是社会主义国家中长大的好孩子。

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没有字数要求。学校从上个term就开始讲怎么写persuasive writing了，发的纸也是有格子的。实际考试不知道，我想应该会有格子吧。

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错了
想起来了
是戴不戴帽子

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